Lil Dono

Wow...that could be published. Perhaps you like the fear, The pain, the crime, the sin. I'm not sure but it seems to me like their should be a colon after ...

I think I know just the thing! That Was Then, This Is Now and The Outsiders Both by S.E. Hinton. Splendid books and the author is actually prided on her ...

The Blue Bistro is very, very good. While the romance between the characters is engaging and real, the setting is simply magical . And don't let the cover fool you, ...

I'm no master at poetry, but I do know that it is rare that poems can be written to express their full meaning and feeling in just ten minutes. This ...

I agree, the head should be more round and the frown less defined. It should all really flow. The grumpiness you get looking at him is good and nice coloring ...

*sigh* For a long time, I loved the Pendragon books. And I still do love some of the time. But after reading them so often, I find they incredibly repetetive. ...

It took me a long time to actually finish Sabriel because I would start it with enthusiam but get bored and set it down. Finished Sabriel finally and thought it ...

When I first read the words "I loved you", my first thought was "Oh gawd, teenage breakup poem, nothing new" but I am so glad to say that minute I ...

Glass skin melts in the sunlight; Hmm...any particular reason you used "glass-like" instead of simple "glass"? I think using an implied metaphor instead of an implied simlie would start off ...

If I had to summarize this poem in a couple words, those unfortunate words would be: Unoriginal, Repetitive, TeenAngst. I can point out at least ten poems on this site ...

Yeah, that's me in the background. I was hungry . Bunny DIE!

That's the general idea; you're the first to get that. :D

I stood quite still Right on the hill For I did not—no— Could not move I was trapped And I knew it For the lupins Had imbued it— A ring ...

I look out to the window out to the sea, You and me going across what the mind can see, Over the moon I can touch the stars, The feeling ...

I stood in a hallway And glanced all around. Where was I? It might just be me, but "all" seems very unnecessary and in my opinion, makes it sound a ...